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Talk:Bulkhead (Prime)

2012-04-06T16:59:04Z

TheCritic: /* Grammar, Spelling and Rewording */

When his pic is on the main page, it leads to [[Ironhide (Prime)]]! {{unsigned|TOM| 22:39, November 25, 2010 (EDT)}}
:Thanks! Fixed. - [[User:Starfield|Starfield]] 21:50, 25 November 2010 (EST)
::Maybe in the Japanese version of Prime, Bulkhead will be renamed Ironhide for consistency with the other franchises. --[[User:NCZ|NCZ]] 21:54, 25 November 2010 (EST)

==Wreckers==
Should we mention in the "Notes" that this is the first incarnation of Bulkead to be a Wrecker?-----[[User:XxxOUTBURSTxxx|XxxOUTBURSTxxx]] 19:22, 26 March 2012 (EDT)
: Again, we're not super-interested in "firsts." --[[User:ItsWalky|ItsWalky]] 21:12, 26 March 2012 (EDT)

== Grammar, Spelling and Rewording ==

"Back on Cybertron, before he became a warrior, Bulkhead was a laborer, working in construction."

I'm no editor, but considering that the sentence only contained fifteen words I doubt it needed three commas. Here is a possible rewording:

"Before he became a warrior Bulkhead worked as a construction laborer on Cybertron."

I also spotted another sentence that could use some slight tweaking:

"However Bulkhead left the Wreckers early on in the war to join Team Prime however."

Nix that last however.

I could fill this page with all the changes I would like to make, but I'm not very good at differentiating between a change that improves the article and a change that only suits my personal preference.

--[[User:TheCritic|TheCritic]] 12:55, 6 April 2012 (EDT)

Talk:Bulkhead (Prime)

2012-04-06T16:57:32Z

TheCritic: /* Grammar, Spelling and Rewording */

Talk:Bulkhead (Prime)

2012-04-06T16:57:05Z

TheCritic: /* Grammar, Spelling and Rewording */

Talk:Bulkhead (Prime)

2012-04-06T16:55:49Z

TheCritic: /* Grammar, Spelling and Rewording */ new section

When his pic is on the main page, it leads to [[Ironhide (Prime)]]! {{unsigned|TOM| 22:39, November 25, 2010 (EDT)}}
:Thanks! Fixed. - [[User:Starfield|Starfield]] 21:50, 25 November 2010 (EST)
::Maybe in the Japanese version of Prime, Bulkhead will be renamed Ironhide for consistency with the other franchises. --[[User:NCZ|NCZ]] 21:54, 25 November 2010 (EST)

==Wreckers==
Should we mention in the "Notes" that this is the first incarnation of Bulkead to be a Wrecker?-----[[User:XxxOUTBURSTxxx|XxxOUTBURSTxxx]] 19:22, 26 March 2012 (EDT)
: Again, we're not super-interested in "firsts." --[[User:ItsWalky|ItsWalky]] 21:12, 26 March 2012 (EDT)

== Grammar, Spelling and Rewording ==

"Back on Cybertron, before he became a warrior, Bulkhead was a laborer, working in construction."

I'm no editor, but considering that the sentence only contained fifteen words I doubt it needed three commas. Here is a possible rewording:

"Before he became a warrior Bulkhead worked as a construction laborer on Cybertron."

I also spotted another sentence that could use some slight tweaking:

"However Bulkhead left the Wreckers early on in the war to join Team Prime however."

Nix that last however.

I could fill this page with all the changes I would like to make, but I'm not very good at differentiating between a change that improves the article and a change that only suits my personal preference.

[[User:TheCritic|TheCritic]] 12:55, 6 April 2012 (EDT)