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There seems to be a LOT of emphasis put on the emotional states of the characters, a lot of it repetitious. I counted "shocked" in there at least three times. It seems really overdone for such a short summary. Is this meant to be the style of the article (perhaps the story itself is overly descriptive of the emotional states, and the intent is to copy that), or is it just plain bad writing? [[User:Luke|Luke]] 20:00, 17 March 2010 (EDT) | There seems to be a LOT of emphasis put on the emotional states of the characters, a lot of it repetitious. I counted "shocked" in there at least three times. It seems really overdone for such a short summary. Is this meant to be the style of the article (perhaps the story itself is overly descriptive of the emotional states, and the intent is to copy that), or is it just plain bad writing? [[User:Luke|Luke]] 20:00, 17 March 2010 (EDT) | ||
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My comment on the edit got cut off (must have hit enter by mistake) but I was going to say I'm not sure if it's a Furmanism or not - similar scenes in different comics with different characters? Though of course in both cases Bludgeon's the leader...probably best as just a note unless there's that crucial third example out there? --16:54, 2 September 2010 (EDT) | |||
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There seems to be a LOT of emphasis put on the emotional states of the characters, a lot of it repetitious. I counted "shocked" in there at least three times. It seems really overdone for such a short summary. Is this meant to be the style of the article (perhaps the story itself is overly descriptive of the emotional states, and the intent is to copy that), or is it just plain bad writing? Luke 20:00, 17 March 2010 (EDT)
Megatron! Megatron! MEGATRON!
My comment on the edit got cut off (must have hit enter by mistake) but I was going to say I'm not sure if it's a Furmanism or not - similar scenes in different comics with different characters? Though of course in both cases Bludgeon's the leader...probably best as just a note unless there's that crucial third example out there? --16:54, 2 September 2010 (EDT)
