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Should we mention in the "Notes" that this is the first incarnation of Bulkead to be a Wrecker?-----[[User:XxxOUTBURSTxxx|XxxOUTBURSTxxx]] 19:22, 26 March 2012 (EDT) | Should we mention in the "Notes" that this is the first incarnation of Bulkead to be a Wrecker?-----[[User:XxxOUTBURSTxxx|XxxOUTBURSTxxx]] 19:22, 26 March 2012 (EDT) | ||
: Again, we're not super-interested in "firsts." --[[User:ItsWalky|ItsWalky]] 21:12, 26 March 2012 (EDT) | : Again, we're not super-interested in "firsts." --[[User:ItsWalky|ItsWalky]] 21:12, 26 March 2012 (EDT) | ||
== Grammar, Spelling and Rewording == | |||
"Back on Cybertron, before he became a warrior, Bulkhead was a laborer, working in construction." | |||
I'm no editor, but considering that the sentence only contained fifteen words I doubt it needed three commas. Here is a possible rewording: | |||
"Before he became a warrior Bulkhead worked as a construction laborer on Cybertron." | |||
I also spotted another sentence that could use some slight tweaking: | |||
"However Bulkhead left the Wreckers early on in the war to join Team Prime however." | |||
Nix that last however. | |||
I could fill this page with all the changes I would like to make, but I'm not very good at differentiating between a change that improves the article and a change that only suits my personal preference. | |||
[[User:TheCritic|TheCritic]] 12:55, 6 April 2012 (EDT) | |||
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When his pic is on the main page, it leads to Ironhide (Prime)! —The preceding unsigned comment was added by TOM (talk • contribs) 22:39, November 25, 2010 (EDT).
- Thanks! Fixed. - Starfield 21:50, 25 November 2010 (EST)
- Maybe in the Japanese version of Prime, Bulkhead will be renamed Ironhide for consistency with the other franchises. --NCZ 21:54, 25 November 2010 (EST)
Wreckers
Should we mention in the "Notes" that this is the first incarnation of Bulkead to be a Wrecker?-----XxxOUTBURSTxxx 19:22, 26 March 2012 (EDT)
- Again, we're not super-interested in "firsts." --ItsWalky 21:12, 26 March 2012 (EDT)
Grammar, Spelling and Rewording
"Back on Cybertron, before he became a warrior, Bulkhead was a laborer, working in construction."
I'm no editor, but considering that the sentence only contained fifteen words I doubt it needed three commas. Here is a possible rewording:
"Before he became a warrior Bulkhead worked as a construction laborer on Cybertron."
I also spotted another sentence that could use some slight tweaking:
"However Bulkhead left the Wreckers early on in the war to join Team Prime however."
Nix that last however.
I could fill this page with all the changes I would like to make, but I'm not very good at differentiating between a change that improves the article and a change that only suits my personal preference.
TheCritic 12:55, 6 April 2012 (EDT)

